Before & After

I have been asked numerous times if I can show potential clients a “before” and “after” sample of my editing/proofreading. Because I do mostly ghostwriting/editing/proofreading, I can’t share even a part of the work I have been given…hence the need for this example. It shows a post that a client gave me and then what I did to polish it for publishing.

So read the post below as it’s the “before” (before the client gave me the task of editing and proofreading it). Perhaps it will help you understand the value of a second opinion. Please ask me if you have any questions.

 

POST BEFORE

EDITING / PROOFREADING

POST AFTER

EDITING / PROOFREADING

Bula (Most powerfull spirit)Bula (The Most Powerful Spirit)
During the dream time, the creation periodDuring the dream time (aka the Creation Period),
a spirit named Bula watched over the Mimi Spirits work.a spirit named Bula watched over the Mimi Spirits as they worked.
All wend well Land, plantes and animals were created.All went well. Land, plants and animals were created.
So Bula went to rest in a part So Bula went to rest in a part
of Kakadu Nation Park called the ‘sickness country’of the Kakadu National Park called the ‘Sickness Country.’
As it came to the lat animal the Mimi’s When it came to the last animal, the Mimis
were not sures what it would become ao were not sure what it would become so they
they made it look like a bird but did not give it any wings.made it look like a bird but didn’t give it any wings.
Then as the last job they created For their last job, they created a human male
a male and a female and ordered them and a female and ordered them to look
to look after the wordl to make sure after the world, to make sure
all was ok and in balance.all was ok and in balance.
The first people did but failed to teach their two kits to treat all well and gud. The first people followed their orders and did a good job. However, they failed to teach their two kids to treat everyone well and good.
Those two kid found the unfinished animal, grabed it and thru it in the air; Those two kids found the unfinished animal,
grabbed it, and threw it in the air. When it landed
it landed hard on the ground and
startet calling: “ouuuu ouch”….
hard on the ground, it started calling: “ouuuu ouch…”
Bula woke up and became very very angry. Bula woke up and became very, very angry.
He went to the partents and told them that they had failed and he now must punish them.He went to the parents and told them that they had failed and he now must punish them.
“I will detroy everything including your children, then I call the Mimis again to recreate all gain but better then before.”“I’ll destroy everything including your children. Then I call the Mimis again to recreate all, but better than before.”
So Bula startets to make things explode, others drownerd others went off in fire. So Bula started to make things explode, some drowned and others were destroyed in fire.
As it was all done he went to the parents After it was all finished, he went to the parents again
again go tell them “You will have new, more children but make sures that you
teach them right this time,
to tell them, “You’ll have plenty more new children but make sure that you teach them right this time
because if you fail again, I will wake up again and if ever I wake up I will destroye all
again and
because, if you fail again, I’ll wake up again and I’ll wake up again and
only real dangeros monster will life on earth.”only real dangerous monsters will live on earth.”
With that he killed the two childrens and went back to rest.With that, he killed the two children and went back to rest.
The Mimis went to work to recreate the world; The Mimis went to work to recreate the world;
the people had more children and thought them well, to respect animals, plants, water, land.the people had more children and taught them well: to respect animals, plants, water, land and people.
This time the Mimi’s turned that last This time the Mimis turned that last
animal into a bird, a birt whos sad sound animal into a bird; a bird whose sad sound
can still be heart these days, can still be heard these days.
it is off courses the Crow.It is, of course, the crow.
And every time you hear the sad sound, Every time you hear the sad sound,
remember those two kits that tortured remember those two kids that tortured
him and got killed for it and then him and got killed for it and then
remember to treat all things with respect.remember to treat all things with respect.
Writen as told by Reggie Written as told by Reggie
(surname not allowed to mention as he, (surname not given, out of respect for my father,
my father passed away some years ago)who passed away some years ago).

 

 

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